I Remain

Tonight I’m at this place
Where black is the shade
White is the sense
Space is the scene
Energy is intense
Everything is rain
Salt in the air
Burning this skin
Everything seems pain
But love is the taste
Memory is the lane
Silence is the music
Crystal on my lips
Whispering the name
Eyes are searching
Green in the sea
My state is in pieces
While I remain at peace

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32 thoughts on “I Remain”

    1. I’m glad that line sang to you…Thank you so very much for your wonderful words, dear Grace βœ¨β€οΈπŸ’«

  1. Loved your though provoking opening lines Navin
    “Tonight I’m at this place
    Where black is the shade
    White is the sense
    Space is the scene
    Energy is intense”

  2. Beautifully expressed and I really love the flow of this..with a “state in pieces” while you remain at peace. The whole poem is a juxtaposition of opposites where pain and love hold hands and slide through your memory..slide down your pane. Exquisite writing as transparent as your glass in the rain dear Navin…

    1. Absolutely true…”where pain & love hold hands”…beautifully said…I’m glad that you enjoyed my poem, dear Karima…thank you very much for your heartfelt words ✨

  3. The flow, the rhythm, the poetic beat that keeps me on and going with your words and in to the Feels. The numbing and dumbing silence, the spaciousness of the darkness that consumes all the broken pieces to lend the experience of the white peace, the blend of the surge and the quiet – and your incredible skill at giving words to these polarities – I can’t help but pour them back here with how they moved in me. This is poetry that I truly enjoy, love, admire and relate to – your poetry speaks fluently to some of my poems from the past.

    1. Even your reflection on my poem is so poetic, Pragalbha…it’s truly the blend of the surge & the quiet…I was so much “gone” in the beautiful memories that this poem is the result…even pain can be beautiful when it’s filled with love…I’m glad that you could connect to my lines & it speaks to some of your poems from the past…I take it as a big compliment…we’re constantly evolving…every micro step counts…my gratitude to you πŸ’«πŸ™βœ¨

      1. “even pain can be beautiful when it’s filled with love” – so true so true, beautiful to even read that. It is my pleasure and privilege to engage with your poetry.

    1. I’m truly honoured that you read my poem the second time…both on IG & WP…thank you very much, dearest Gabriela βœ¨β€οΈπŸ’«

  4. β€œ My state is in pieces
    While I remain at peace” The perfect ending exploring the many facets of the paradox of life. Gorgeous, dearest Navin. βœ¨β€οΈπŸŒΉπŸ™πŸ’«

    1. Exactly…you got the essence…thank you so very much for liking my writings, dearest Jeff…I’m grateful πŸ’«β€οΈβœ¨πŸ™πŸŒŸπŸ₯°

      1. Oh, I’m glad this is so. I love your writings, dearest Navin. You’re most welcome, my dear friend. Always. πŸ™β€οΈπŸŒΉπŸ₯°πŸŒΊ

  5. This poem is so dynamic, moving quickly yetn holding the space that requires patience. Thank you for sharing. πŸ™

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